Earth-bound sprites
tall, at ease
Awaiting the breeze,
waiting to dance.
Dancers
Bluster & Absurdity
Exaggerations by Eric Kofoid
Earth-bound sprites
tall, at ease
Awaiting the breeze,
waiting to dance.
So cute. –K
Dr. Seuss characters of the garden variety aka wind dancers I— thanks to you—saw in their natural habitat before you immortalized them here.
Beautiful…so simple yet elegant. – Rich
Lovely. Beautiful minimalist piece. Reminds me of Lorine Niedecker’s poems.
I’m wondering … without the photo, could a title give the reader some reference to the object of the poem? This is an ekphrastic poem, too, if the visual is presented with it. Can the poem stand alone but with a title anchoring it? Makes me think of the title A TREE GROWS IN BROOKLYN for that great American novel.
Lovely piece, Eric.
Yes, I thought the same thing. I could “free” it from the photo by prefacing with
“Green feathered stems
facing morning’s light, …”
I find charm in the dependency inherent it its present state, but it would definitely fall flat if read over the radio! Something to be said for both…
Improved and a good example of responding to another poet’s critique.